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For Mike's story:
1. The end of the story, it makes me feel it ends really quickly.
2. All the details, like the stuff in the room, and the process of the girl's experiment.
3. Might be the kind of liquid, I think named those liquids were much better than call them by colors.
4. At the start, when he writes about the stuff in the room.
5. Like I said in question 3, use the colors of liquids might be a bit bored for readers. Also, her actions during the experiment, Mike could write more details on that.
6. I think Mike already use all the stuff in the picture.
1. The twist of the story is my favorite part, which really surprised me.
2. He uses action verb that we use to describe a chemistry experiment, like flip over.
3. I think he needs the start of his story, like why the girl wants to do the experiment.
4. I think is the ending, I really like it, this will surprised the reader.
5. I don't think there are some parts of the story makes me confused.
6. Mike's story has an interesting ending but he really needs the start of his story, the start helps him to explain the story.
For John's story:
1. I like the structure that he describes the life of that prince.
2. The whole experience of the prince was really clear.
3. I think the ending is too simple.
4. It's probably the process that the prince has more and more business, from this part I start to feel bored with this story.
5. John needs to put more detail on the process that the prince started to feel obsessed with power.
6. I think John did well in using the objects in the picture.
1. My favorite part is the start, the part that talks about how the prince becomes the king.
2. He used many kills during his writing, it shows how bloody the war of getting the seat of the king is.
3. It has a clear start and end, but I think should add more details.
4. I'm not sure about the climax of this story, I feel like it's when the prince gets the seat of the king.
5. There's no sentences that make me confused.
6. The story is already interesting, but he should add more details, especially at the ending.
1. The end of the story, it makes me feel it ends really quickly.
2. All the details, like the stuff in the room, and the process of the girl's experiment.
3. Might be the kind of liquid, I think named those liquids were much better than call them by colors.
4. At the start, when he writes about the stuff in the room.
5. Like I said in question 3, use the colors of liquids might be a bit bored for readers. Also, her actions during the experiment, Mike could write more details on that.
6. I think Mike already use all the stuff in the picture.
1. The twist of the story is my favorite part, which really surprised me.
2. He uses action verb that we use to describe a chemistry experiment, like flip over.
3. I think he needs the start of his story, like why the girl wants to do the experiment.
4. I think is the ending, I really like it, this will surprised the reader.
5. I don't think there are some parts of the story makes me confused.
6. Mike's story has an interesting ending but he really needs the start of his story, the start helps him to explain the story.
For John's story:
1. I like the structure that he describes the life of that prince.
2. The whole experience of the prince was really clear.
3. I think the ending is too simple.
4. It's probably the process that the prince has more and more business, from this part I start to feel bored with this story.
5. John needs to put more detail on the process that the prince started to feel obsessed with power.
6. I think John did well in using the objects in the picture.
1. My favorite part is the start, the part that talks about how the prince becomes the king.
2. He used many kills during his writing, it shows how bloody the war of getting the seat of the king is.
3. It has a clear start and end, but I think should add more details.
4. I'm not sure about the climax of this story, I feel like it's when the prince gets the seat of the king.
5. There's no sentences that make me confused.
6. The story is already interesting, but he should add more details, especially at the ending.
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